I like how during the more intense or anxiety inducing moments the narrator goes into a mode of repetition of words/phrases. Very effective for emotional emphasis and how the mind kinda gets stuck or lodged on repeat a bit.
I also Love this dialogue:
“You think I’m going to get a gun and go and shoot a goddam poor mother wolf who has probably got a bunch of babies back in the bush and is just trying to protect them, the way you’re trying to protect yours?” he said quietly.
Caro said, “Only two. They only have two at a time.”
”O.K. O.K. I’m talking to your mother.”
“You don’t know that,” my mother said. “You don’t know if it’s got hungry cubs or anything.”
I had never thought she’d talk to him like that.
Caro’s reply made me laugh and then the rest of the dialogue dynamic feels Real.
Yup. During the scene with the wolf I started to realize that this was going to be a story about death and loss. Strong foreshadowing throughout - makes it a tight, strong story.
Wow! Amazing short story. Brilliant writing. Worth taking nice and slow.
“The thing is to be happy,” he said. “No matter what. Just try that. You can. It gets to be easier and easier. It’s nothing to do with circumstances. You wouldn’t believe how good it is. Accept everything and then tragedy disappears. Or tragedy lightens, anyway, and you’re just there, going along easy in the world.”
Loved this - many layers. Wonderful writing.
Solid.
I like how during the more intense or anxiety inducing moments the narrator goes into a mode of repetition of words/phrases. Very effective for emotional emphasis and how the mind kinda gets stuck or lodged on repeat a bit.
I also Love this dialogue:
Caro’s reply made me laugh and then the rest of the dialogue dynamic feels Real.
Yup. During the scene with the wolf I started to realize that this was going to be a story about death and loss. Strong foreshadowing throughout - makes it a tight, strong story.
Wow! Amazing short story. Brilliant writing. Worth taking nice and slow.